Doon ay kaya kong ipunin lahat ng bituin
Doon ay kaya kong igapos ihip ng hangin
Doon ay kaya kong pagbawal buhos ng ulan
Sa panaginip lang kita mahahagkan t’wina
Doon lang

There I could pick up all the stars in heaven
There I could put the breeze and winds into a prison
There I could tell the clouds up in the sky to stop the rain
Only in dreams could I ever hold you once again
There I could

why didn’t you use gather instead of pick up?
gapos is not prison… and it would capture the same image if you have used tie up the breeze
tell the clouds? maybe ban the rain from dropping
I think it was a kiss not holding

just my take on your translation.
I could be wrong, I’m not a tagalog speaker after all.

Blind, Mute and Deaf

You’re groping in the darkness, the nighttimes never cease
Views and colors of this earth, to you they don’t exist
Friend don’t be bothered by the problems of this lonely world.
Your eyes won’t see the insanity, the tragedies will not be told.

Chorus

The mirrors of reality show the truth within your heart.
The mass of humanity are zombies wandering the dark.
Without the sight, without the ears, they stammer, a broken harp.
A life in chain and shattered dreams, the goals can be so far.

You tried to voice the music; your lips would never give.
Unheard, the clamor in your heart, your love won’t be received.
Just lift your hands and show your fingers, so they may understand
In your muted silence; the angels wait for your command.

The hum drums of society slide like a pantomime.
The music froze in silence even after you throw the dime.
Paradise have gone astray, my friend, you won’t need to hear
The prison of your silence, is a home without a tear

It’s not your generation. I guess you want translations of Paramore or Sunny Day Real Estate or Bullet for My Valentine.

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